Tuesday, October 11, 2005

To harness a moment...(address)

Address: does the inconsistent capitalization and punctuation make this too hard to follow or does it help the poem flow?


To harness a moment
significant
in its singularity
though never obvious
to the rushing commuter
nor important to the
state of the union
to corral it
saddle it
mount it
(though not always
on the first try)
and ride it
all the way home to
the page

that is the purpose
of a poem.

9 comments:

pinkroses said...

I think the capitolization and the punctuation make the peom flow beautifully.

Fogosa said...

I think the capitalization seems fairly consistent and is not distracting - but I think that the lack of punctuation at the beginning is a little hard to follow

Nero said...

the capitaliztion and puncuation make these poem flow

alto_mama said...

I think the punctuation helps it flow. It also makes it unique and more expressive.

Nero said...

the capitaliztion and puncuation make these poem flow

always_singing said...

I like that the poem lacks consistant capitalization and punctuation...it makes the line breaks and new stanza all the more significant and increases the flow and power of the poem.

Tuesday said...

I think that the style improves the poem - it's less formal and more like a train of thought or stream of consciousness. The second line confused me at first; I especially like the lines "to corral it" through "... first try)"

achoo said...

I think that the inconsistent capitalization and punctuation makes this piece more like a real poem instead of just a bunch of sentences. It looks as if there the author is spilling their thoughts on paper. =D

carebear said...

This is a test comment.the capatailization is fine.