Newborn Poems by Student Poets at Peak to Peak Charter School
"Distraught" is a cumbersome word choice for that line--I get caught up on it instead of flowing through the poem. Is there something else that could capture the essence of that word, but that fits better into the form of the line/verse?
I like distraught, but I got confused at the very beginning
Sorry my last post didn't really make sense... What I mean is that it sounds like you are holding your or someone else's eyes? I don't know if that's what you meant to convey, but it kinda tripped me up. The second stanza is really awesome, though!
I ALSO like the word distraught. I really like this poem. You're poems are the best eva! lol, love you lots! Keep writing these wonderful poems.
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