Saturday, April 08, 2006

Time (Press)

Much more is needed
She says, as the efforts fall
D'clining, like whispers

3 comments:

Hilachita said...

Very nice! I like the quiet power of each word you chose, and the so clearly expressed futility of 'her' comment in the first line.

Soma Obsidian said...

Thank you, Hilachita. You just provided me with some insight I didn't even realize was present in my poem.

juniper*tears said...

I think you need a title and then it would help the message behind the poem.