Wednesday, March 01, 2006

Winter Magic (press)

Winter Magic

I look at the glistening snow
Oh how it beckons me so
It cries a wonderful song
To have me come join along
As it crunches beneath my feet
Oh how I wish it was heat
I fall down and look around
Then make a snow angel on the ground
I whisper into the snow
"I wish all could know
The joys of being outside
In natures mysterious tide"

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

I really like it just the way it is

Anonymous said...

i can see you like winter. i like how happy you make winter sound.
when i put my poem on here i don't know if you will anymore.

Anonymous said...

Maybe, I don't know, but maybe if you took out the "come" in " to come join along" it would sound a little better...IDK just a suggestion

esperanza said...

OOH! "Nature's mysterious tide." I like that. I makes the reader think.

Anonymous said...

or you can put a comma after come...just to make it flow better...

Anonymous said...

I like the word choice a lot. The last couple of lines didn't make sence at first but after reading it a couple of times it started to make more sence and flow. I think that you should check for spelling.

BetaWar said...

Amazing. Reminds me totally of the last winter wonder land.How I love snow...

Hilachita said...

I like how the beginning it's just snow, but then at then end when you whisper to it, you give it more of a 'soul.'

California_Dreamin said...

great poem grumpy as always i really like it