Thursday, October 13, 2005

You (press)


but, know
you and her
you and me
use her
bend her
break her
abuse her
and my wrath
will be yours
with care
friends or enemies?

(I wrote that poem to any and all of my friends' boyfriends)


esperanza said...

Nice. I am totally addicted to this blog already! That's a cool poem. I've always liked it, and I totally agree. The one thing I would change is the very last line - it just sounds a little cliche. Pretty sweet otherwise!

pinkroses said...

I do agree with esperanza. I think the last line sounds a little cliche, but the lest of the poem flows well and the meaning is really clear. :D

pinkroses said...

And I know which friends boyfriend you wrote it for!! lol. I think this poem just reeks of hostility towards the boys trying to take away your friends! Lol. I really like it. It's a great warning.

Hilachita said...

It's NOT take away my friends - it's hurt them or change who they r for the worst, not the better

Anonymous said...

Woah. That's very nice. I love the way you wrote it! It seems like it is something that means a lot to you. WELL DONE!