Thursday, October 13, 2005

Siblings (Bless)

Brother smashing
Brother squashing
Forms of mean brother Abuse

Sister mashing
Sister beating
Forms of mean sister Torture

Siblings can be cruel
Siblings can be kind
But worst of all they can

Brother smashing
Sister mashing
Forms of siblings Love


La Maestra said...

This poem has some great surprises in it.

I love the antithesis between the brother/sister and the assonance between "smashing" and "mashing".

I also love the idea that love could be a negative thing ("the worst of all"...)

Tuesday said...

The rhythm definitely makes this poem stand out. I really like how well you thought out how the poem sounds spoken out loud - for example, the similar sounding words that mean similar things. Also I'm noticing some irony, which makes it even better.

Anonymous said...

I really like this poem because it is so true and real

Anonymous said...

I love this poem!! It makes me wish I had siblings. *sniffle*