Thursday, October 13, 2005

Mask (address)

address...does the breaking up of phrases and ideas enhance the meaning or distract the reader?


Mask

What I see
when you glance at me
Fear.
call me Horrifying
frightening
intimidating
strong
confident
ready.
something
I have
you
begging for it
needing it
feeding on it
afraid
can't let go
You put others down
i sink to your level
and
see your pain
see your anguish
see your truth
see your human
behind your smiles, your sneers, your snickers
What do you see
when you look at me?

1 comment:

esperanza said...

Ooh, that's good. I think the breaking up of words, etc. is fine for the most part. It doesn't really distract the reader; it places emphasis on certain ideas instead.